Author: SSZE_A501
Title: [19] Rated Fanfic Writer Kim Jonghyun & [19] Rated Fanfic Reader Lee Taemin
Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/25710/2/19-rated-fanfic-writer-kim-jonghyun-19-rated-fanfic-reader-lee-taemin-hiatus-jonghyun-jongtae-key-minho-onew-shinee-taemin
Reviewer: [ Sung.ii.ee ]
Site: Writers Strike - VST http://writer-strike-vst.blogspot.com/

Title: 5/5
First impression of the title? *PFFT* PUAHAHAHA POOR TAEMIN!. Seriously, I cackled a bit at that. It just seemed so funny. I gave you full marks not only because it matches the plot and the story, but it's awesome as well :D

Poster/Background: 9/10
Colorful, fitting, pretty, it really shoves the reader in the mood. At first, I thought it was like, an usual yaoi fanfic, but the poster just deceived it :D

Forewords: 10/10
Great :D Insight of the plot, main characters, nothing more I could ask for ^^

Plot: 13/15
"I came close to him and gave a kiss on his left eye, then went to his right eye giving a kiss as well. I looked at him with a surprised face, I put my finger against his lips and said,
"This is for later.""
NYAAAAA. I went sooo fangirl on this xD
At first, I thought it was like, an usual yaoi rated fanfic *expecting uber juicy parts*. OMAFAGAH THE CUTENEEESSSS *fangirlsqueal* So yeah, props to you for that.

(Mind me, I'm a sucker for cute yaoi fanfics... xD)

Creativity/Originality: 15/15
- a bit too speechless and still fangirling, but holds up max points -
- drops immediately and returns to fangirling -

Flow: 8/10
- regains composure -
As much as I loved the fanfic, I'm afraid it's going a bit slow ): It's a pity that it's on hiatus, but it's understadable. You should work on 2-3 stories maximum at once, so you can concentrate. Anyway, as I said. I think it's a bit too slow for the number of chapters...

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 6/10
Vocabulary was average. Maybe your first language isn't English, and maybe most of your readers don't have English as their first language to use sophisticated words, but the vocabulary you used isn't anywhere near impressive. Besides, there are a lot of verb-subject misconcordances, and I saw that you used 'my-self', 'your-self' and 'him-self' a lot. There's no need for the dash '-', since it's written in one word. You should totally have your chapters double checked by a grammar nazi before posting them (:.

Characterization: 8/10
I'm not saying that I couldn't portray your characters that well, but from the very start, I labeled Jonghyun as an eternal high school pervert. LOL. So it was pretty hard for me to change his image to the caring guy... And I can indeed see Taemin as a shy guy, but not to the point of crying when he thinks of his ex-boyfriend, get what I mean?

Writing Style: 7/10
Too much dialogue, too little description, too little narration. I understand that it's all about what they say, their reactions and so on, but it looks more like a script to me. You could've added some gestures, voice tones and stuff like that after most of the lines they speak, y'know. Maybe you wanted them to have a certain expression or feeling, but the reader might end up portraying it his/her own way, which may be quite different from yours... Also, there's either too much dialogue or too much description. You need to balance them, lace them around with one another, so it blends well and creates an easy readable and understandable fic. :D

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
You caught me in a good mood; I needed that. So I enjoyed every tiny bit of your fic. Also, please contact me when you're gonna start on it again, since I'm really really curious of what's going to happen :D

Sub-Total: 86/100

Extras: 5/5
Sorry for the extra long wait T_T. I'm really really happy you weren't mad at me for this, though it was just a thing of my stupidity. That should be a lesson for me to check my spam folder from time to time as well = w = '' Thanks for the good time as I read your fanfic! Keep writing, good luck! I'm sure you'll improve. :D

Total: 91/105