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My Valentine
Tuesday, January 10, 2006
Author: RossEureka Title: My Valentine Link: www.winglin.net/fanfic/ross5 Reviewer: Juliada3 Site: Writers Strike - VST http://writer-strike-vst.blogspot.com Title: 3/5 This is a pretty normal title, and obviously marks it as a love story. Poster/Background: 10/10 The poster and background are both made really well, and the font shows up wonderfully against it. Good choice! Forewords: 6/10 You gave a pretty good introduction, but you did not give any information about the characters' dispostions or their traits. This will help readers understand your characters better. It does grab readers in, and hooks them into wanting to read it, though. Quite dramatic. Plot: 9/15 The plot is pretty typical of a love story, and it even comes complete with a giant misunderstanding. However, the misunderstanding is different, in that it is on purpose by one side, without knowing the other side's story. This is what makes your story different from all the others. Creativity/Originality: 10/15 This was okay in originality, as it was mostly a typical love story/drama, except for the huge misunderstanding. That sounds like it would really suck if it happened in real life. I feel for you... Flow: 8/10 This flowed pretty well, except for the ending. I feel you could have built up more tension as they were staring at each other. That would have made it more dramatic, and even better. Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10 Overall, your spelling, grammar, and vocabulary was pretty good, except in a few places. "Purchase a safe answer" is not correct usage, and there were a couple of commas out of place, but other than that, it was fine. Characterization: 7/10 Since it was a one-shot, characterization is harder to do. If you had expanded a little more during their point-of-views, then it would help grow their characters more. Writing Style: 7/10 You spaced in between everything, making it easier to read. However, you switched between paragraph style and dialogue style. If you stick with one, it makes it look much better. Paragraph is better form and has more room for details, but dialogue style is better for speaking action between the characters. Overall Enjoyment: 5/5 I actually really liked this. It was different, and it wasn't boring at all. Good job! Sub-Total: 75/100 Extras: 5/5 I'm so sorry this is so late! Total: 80/105  |
