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ABOUT  NAME: Writers Strike! - VST TYPE: One shot and co-author requests OPENED: 1/1/11 WEBMISS: Carrie COWEBMISS: SaMaNtHa EMAIL: writerstrike@hotmail.com  Welcome to Writers Strike, the sister site of Versahtyle, where you can "Let your thoughts flow free, and we'll create your dream" through one shots and co author requests! Navigation TAGBOARD Music |
Love Through Music
Tuesday, January 10, 2006
Author: Amber Title: Love Through Music Link: http://winglin.net/fanfic/Amber02/ Reviewer: Juliada3 Site: Writers Strike - VST http://writer-strike-vst.blogspot.com Title: 4/5 This is a pretty good title, and it tells what the story is about without giving too much away. Poster/Background: 9/10 The poster is good, except since Hebe is one of the main characters, she should be on the poster as well. The background is good, not too crowded, making the text nice and legible. Forewords: 8/10 You introduce two of the characters, which is good. However, since it is a GuiLun story, like you said, you should also include information about Gui Gui as well. You gave a good synopsis, which helps draw readers in. Plot: 14/15 Your story had a really good plot. There were lots of new elements in it, and the ending was different than what I had expected. Instead of the cliche where the guy falls in love with the main character after she comforts him, this is completely different as the guy kills himself in order to be with the one he loves. It feels poetic and beautiful. I feel like you could have developed Hebe's character better by using more examples to show a greater contrast between her personality before and after she met Aaron. Creativity/Originality: 15/15 This was very creative and original. It had many new elements, and was not boring at all. I only wish it could be longer!!! If you did another story, like a sequel, and told Aaron and Gui Gui's story, that would be even better! Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10 Your spelling was almost perfect, with only one or two mistakes. Your grammar had a few more mistakes, but it did not affect your writing that much. If you used better vocabulary that conveyed your thoughts better, your story would be even more moving. Characterization: 7/10 I feel like Aaron was characterized really well, but Hebe and Gui Gui were not. If you expanded Hebe's character more, she would be perfect. If you had added a flashback, and told the story from Aaron's point of view in that time period, it would probably show his relationship with Gui Gui better and shed more light on the kind of person Gui Gui was. Writing Style: 10/10 Your writing style was very nice and neat. There were spaces every couple of sentences, so it kept your story legible. Overall Enjoyment: 5/5 Sub-Total: 75/100 Extras: 5/5 Total: 80/105  |
